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DZ-63: Tools for Better Dialogue 2 - Hook and Eye

12.31.2019 - By Chas Fisher and Stuart WillisPlay

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How can you create flow and contrast in your dialogue? A full three years after the first instalment (and one of our most popular), Stu and Chas have kidnapped Stephen Cleary to once again develop some craft tools around dialogue. It would be fair to say that - in that time - all three have learnt a lot more about dialogue than they knew in 2016. It would be also fair to say that Stephen perhaps learnt a little more through his research into “genderlect”. In Part II, we analyse key scenes from films and TV shows famous for their dialogue, namely FLEABAG (Season 2, Episode 5), JUNO and DEADWOOD (The Pilot). The biggest tools we explore are: the hook and eye; how dialogue can reveal status and empathy; rhythm; contrast and affinity; and pacing. And just to help us all out, Stephen rounds out the episode with some quick fire examples - FIVE EASY PIECES, JERRY MAGUIRE, GROSSE POINTE BLANK, and NOTTING HILL (again) -  and further dialogue tips. Thanks to Chris Walker for editing this episode during the holiday season. RUNNING ORDER Intro/Groundwork Status and Gender (@ 05:52) FLEABAG (Season 2, Episode 5) by Phoebe Waller-Bridge (@ 15:26) WATCH: Hair Is Everything — https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=q97iIDx-b7U JustWatch: https://www.justwatch.com/us/tv-show/fleabag JUNO by Diablo Cody (@ 47:41) WATCH: Juno Tells Her Parents: — https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tWC-R-q85JU  JustWatch: https://www.justwatch.com/us/movie/juno DEADWOOD (Pilot) (@ 01:20:20) WATCH: Seth Bullock Hangs a Man in Montana https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TtgjwmYgTOg JustWatch: https://www.justwatch.com/us/tv-show/deadwood More Dialogue Tips and Techniques (@ 01:40:55) WATCH: Jerry Maguire “Show me the money” - https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ZTFJocQBLyE WATCH: Grosse Pointe Blanke “You can never go home again” - https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WgLr6qlpec4 WATCH: Notting Hill “Kitchen Scene” - https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xtQShHQuPwI&t;=93s EPISODE LINKS LISTEN: DZ-31: Tools for Better Dialogue (Part 1) WATCH: Five Easy Pieces “Side Order of Toast”  - https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=38maVb_30ng FOLLOW: Stephen Cleary JOIN: Stephen Cleary Workshops READ: Genderlect / Language and Gender READ: The Truth About How Much Women Talk — and Whether Men Listen Please considering rating or subscribing to us on Apple Podcasts! or sharing us on the Social Medias! We like finding new listeners. We are @stuwillis and @chasffisher on twitter. And you can find @draft_zero on Instagram and Twitter. Many thanks to all our patrons but particularly to Theis, Jesse, Daniel, Jack, Chris, Khrob, Sandra, Nick, Matteo, and Carrie. They’re good humans. BUY DRAFT ZERO MERCH via TeePublic

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