Talking about show vs tell at the scene level is a little bit harder than talking about it at the paragraph and scene levels.

But it’s also a tiny bit easier.

When you’re looking for telling at this level of the story, what you’re looking for is a couple of things:

1. A butt ton of backstory.

You can have bits of these things in your stories. Where us authors get into trouble is when we have a lot of it and we have a lot of it in telling language.

So, that really happens when we do this:

Bud Godzilla looked down on his sweet friend turned zombie. They’d been friends forever, so this hurt. Three page description of how they met – info dump or backstory

Or:

Bud Godzilla looked down on his sweet friend turned zombie. They’d been friends forever, so this hurt. Three page scene of how they met – flashback.

You usually want to limit these places and instead sprinkle in action/dialogue/details throughout to help the readers understand that the characters have history or the world exists before the book begins.

There’s a balance between telling too much and too little. You want the reader to anticipate that something cool is going to happen or has happened, but you don’t want to leave them confused or knowing way too much.

You know how sometimes you’ll be on the plane and the person will not stop talking for six hours about their boil, their aunts’ piano obsessions, their dinner plans while you just want to finish watching the inflight movie? That’s what happens with those paragraphs of backstory, flashbacks and info dumping.

Everything is paused. The stakes are gone. And when that happens? You risk losing your reader completely.

Pogie says keep your eyes on the prize, my friend, and laugh.

This comes from the Writing Cooperative and it's really about how to spot your info dump, which is an exercise.

"Once you spot an info-dump, ask yourself the following questions:

1. "How much of this information is it essential for the reader to know right now? Most of the information will not be essential. Be ruthless. Cut it out.

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