Let's appreciate a passage from Harry Potter:
'He started looking for socks. He found a pair under his bed and, after pulling a spider off one of them, put them on. Harry was used to spiders, because the cupboard under the stairs was full of them, and that was where he slept.'
First, let's look at the sentence: 'He started looking for socks. He found a pair under his bed and, after pulling a spider off one of them, put them on.' When I first read this, it felt a bit wordy, like '...off one of them, put them on.' This whole sentence could be rewritten more succinctly as 'He found socks under his bed and put them on.' Do you find this version easier to understand?
Were you startled to realize there was a spider on the sock? And Harry just calmly brushed it off. No wonder the original text specifically says, ‘He started looking for socks.’ If there’s always a chance of finding spiders in your socks, you’d better check before putting them on!
So, why did J.K. Rowling choose the longer form? It echoes the next sentence she really wanted to convey: 'Harry was used to spiders, because the cupboard under the stairs was full of them, and that was where he slept.' See? Just like we guessed, the reason for Harry's indifferent reaction to the spider is clearly explained in the next sentence. The second sentence starts by stating the conclusion - Harry is accustomed to spiders. It then explains the reason. Ah, now it makes sense. Harry's sleeping place was in the cupboard under the stairs, full of spiders. If someone is afraid of spiders, just thinking about it is terrifying, and the description 'full of them' adds even more intensity.
Did you notice the author's description, 'Harry slept in the cupboard under the stairs, which was full of spiders,' is similar to the first sentence in its indirect approach? First, she points out 'because the cupboard under the stairs was full of them' – are cupboards full of spiders a common thing in every home? What's so special about that? Once everyone has the image of a cupboard full of spiders, the next line hits: 'and that was where he slept.' Immediately, the image of a spider-filled cupboard connects with Harry's sleeping place, deepening our understanding of his situation.
Let's savor the first sentence again: 'He started looking for socks. He found a pair under his bed and, after pulling a spider off one of them, put them on.' Does the original writing delve deeper, offering more impact when paired with the following sentence? It's like a teaser, setting the stage for what comes next.
Finally, let's hear it once more:
'He started looking for socks. He found a pair under his bed and, after pulling a spider off one of them, put them on. Harry was used to spiders, because the cupboard under the stairs was full of them, and that was where he slept.'
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我們來欣賞一段哈利波特原文裡的描述： “He started looking for socks. He found a pair under his bed and, after pulling a spider off one of them, put them on. Harry was used to spiders, because the cupboard under the stairs was full of them, and that was where he slept.”
首先我們來看這句 “He started looking for socks. He found a pair under his bed and, after pulling a spider off one of them, put them on.” 我一開始看到這句的時候感覺有點饒舌，像是 “…..off one of them, put them on.” 其實這整句話在表達的意思可以改寫成精簡方式去描述 “He found socks under his bed and put them on.” 大家有覺的這句話比較好理解嗎？
看懂這句話大家有被嚇到嗎？襪子上居然有蜘蛛，而哈利只是淡定的把蜘蛛撥開，難怪原文要特別說一句“He started looking for socks.”，如果隨時有蜘蛛在襪子裡，那麼起床後不先看一下還真不行。
那麼，為什麼J.K.羅琳選擇了較長的寫法呢？這呼應了下一句作者真正想要表達的意境“Harry was used to spiders, because the cupboard under the stairs was full of them, and that was where he slept.” 看吧，跟上句我們的猜測一樣，哈利對蜘蛛淡反應的原因，就在下一句說明清楚了，第二句開頭就先說明了結論，哈利很習慣蜘蛛的出現了，先點明結果，下面再說明原因，阿哈…..原來如此，原來哈利睡覺的地方在樓梯下的壁櫥，而壁櫥裡滿是蜘蛛，如果有人剛好是怕蜘蛛的，光想就覺的很光想就很恐怖，而“full of them,”的形容又更加有感了。
大家有發現，作者在形容“哈利睡覺的地方在樓梯下的壁櫥，而壁櫥裡滿是蜘蛛”的寫法也跟第一句一樣不直接點名嗎？一樣是先點出 “ because the cupboard under the stairs was full of them” 壁櫥裡滿是蜘蛛不是每個家都一樣？有什麼稀奇的？等大家腦子裡都是自家壁櫥裡滿是蜘蛛的印象後，下一句再點出“and that was where he slept.” 腦子裡想像中滿是蜘蛛壁櫥裡立刻聯結上哈利睡覺的地方，大家是不是對哈利的處境有更深刻的感受？
我們回來再細細品味一下第句的描述“He started looking for socks. He found a pair under his bed and, after pulling a spider off one of them, put them on.”原文這樣的寫法是否描寫的更深入仔細一點？配合下一句的情境更有感？它就像一個小預告，為接下來的情節做鋪墊。
最後我們再來聽一次： “He started looking for socks. He found a pair under his bed and, after pulling a spider off one of them, put them on. Harry was used to spiders, because the cupboard under the stairs was full of them, and that was where he slept.”
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