Now obviously you gotta listen to this unfortunately long episode to understand the purpose of it. But I’ll lay it out gently here as well: Emma sent me a poem for to think over. I go through the particularities of formatting in arduous detail, and talk at length about the considerations. All in all, it takes me about thirty minutes to make some minor edits because of the amount of communication around them. This is fun if you are someone who does not bore easily, and are curious what kind of things I think about after writing for years, only to arrive finally at mediocrity.

Special thank you to Emma for volunteering their work to be scrutinized, it is a vulnerable thing.

Here is Emma’s Original Poem:

I Will Have A Panic Attack

And here is the edited piece!

A NOTE: I had noticed when I first read the poem the way in which the line

‘the atmosphere that is’

could be understood. But forgot and missed it when I was doing edits. I stand by the usage of ‘which’ to change the pacing, but given the intention behind it and how successful it is I have changed it back in the edit below, with added punctuation to better inform the reading as a qualifier. “that is”

Pick your poison.

I Will Have A Panic Attack

If you are at all interested in having your work picked over publicly, message me. It might feel nice to be examined, to be the center of attention.

Thanks as always for listening,

Oliver