The microphones again find us aboard the Independence of the Seas*, to talk about how terribly ugly this manuscript is, and what we can do to make it pretty. In this episode we drill down on line-by-line, paragraph-by-paragraph revisions. This stage of the revision process is where our prose gets wordsmithed. This episode runs long, touching on:

* Punching up the pacing

* Turning things upside down

* Parallelisms

* Adverbial compression,

* The pyramid of abstraction

* Free and direct thought

* Replacing negative-information descriptions

* extreme editing exercises like "one sentence per concept."

Obviously if you want more than just the bullet points you'll need to have a listen...

*NOTE: Registration is now open for the 2016 Out of Excuses Workshop and Retreat!

This episode was engineered aboard The Independence of the Seas by Bert Grimm, and mastered ashore in a volcanic caldera by Alex Jackson.