A new song, lyrics by myself. I originally thought I was happy with it, even tho' it breaks one of the "rules" of lyric writing. The verses are sung to different people!!! verse1 is sung to a partner; verse2 is sung to a possible interloper. I am wondering if this is confusing to a listener, maybe the lyric should be rewritten, maybe to even create two new songs. Would love to hear any comments you may have.
The song is sung using my cloned voice, Suno V6 provides the music and production.
compare verse2 with a rewrite:-
We will never doubt our love / ...................Don’t you ever doubt our love
Don't you even think about stories of / ....I will never, ever let anyone
Stealing her away / .....................................Steal you away
She is my lifelong soulmate / ....................You are my lifelong soulmate
Can't you accept it's our fate / ................. Can’t you accept it’s our fate
Not just a cliche / ........................................... Not just a cliche