A phone call scene can look deceptively small on the page. Two people talk, some information changes hands, then someone hangs up, but if that’s all the scene is doing, it may be falling flat.

In this episode of Master Fiction Writing, Stuart Wakefield takes a deep dive into one of fiction’s most overlooked craft moments: the phone call scene. Why do so many phone calls in novels, short stories, and novellas feel like convenient little tubes for information? And how can writers turn them into scenes full of pressure, subtext, tension, comedy, longing, and consequence?

This episode explores why a phone call is never just two people talking. A good phone call scene can reveal a lie, expose a relationship dynamic, shift power between characters, create suspense, deepen romance, or make a reader laugh because the visible half of the scene is quietly falling apart.

You’ll learn how to diagnose a flat phone call, how to give your point-of-view character something active to want, how to use silence and pauses, and how to make the unseen caller a powerful dramatic force. Stuart also looks at how phone calls work across genres including romance, mystery, thriller, horror, comedy, family drama, literary fiction, historical fiction, and speculative fiction.

Includes practical revision questions and a simple exercise to help you rewrite one phone call scene in your own manuscript.

Links Mentioned

Stuart Wakefield / The Book Coach:www.thebookcoach.co

ProWritingAid Write With Pride week:https://prowritingaid.com/write-with-pride/sign-up

Stuart is presenting at ProWritingAid’s Write With Pride week on 24 June. Session title to be confirmed before publishing.

Action Items from This Episode

Find one phone call scene in your manuscript, ideally one that feels a little flat, functional, or overly focused on delivering information.

Read the scene once and highlight only the information being exchanged. What facts does the reader need to know?

Then ask:

• Why is this moment a phone call rather than an in-person scene, text, letter, or summary?
• What does the point-of-view character want before the call begins?
• What do they fear will happen?
• What are they trying not to say?
• What does the other caller want, hide, avoid, or control?
• What can the reader see that one or both characters cannot?
• What changes by the end of the call?
• What would be lost if the scene were cut?

Next, add the visible half of the scene. Where is your character? What are they doing while they speak? Who might overhear? What object, interruption, silence, or physical action could carry pressure?

Finally, rewrite the call so the spoken conversation and the visible scene tell slightly different truths.

Let the dialogue say one thing, then let the body, setting, silence, or timing reveal another.

That gap is where the reader leans in.