In this week's IELTS Writing episode we're brainstorming ideas and writing an opinion essay for the following topic:

Some people think that children under 18 years old should receive full-time education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Intro: It is believed that minors under the age of 18 would benefit from the provision of education on a full-time basis. I partially agree with this idea to the extent that it’s practical.

P1: The benefits of such a policy are clear. Firstly, if minors obtained full-time education, this would lower unemployment figures and decrease competition for jobs for the period when they are at school. Secondly, in addition to combating the unemployment rate, there would be fewer opportunities for the children to be involved in juvenile delinquency since they will be engaged in studying full-time. Thirdly, assuming the education content is structured in such a way, the students could be better prepared for their working life and future career. For instance, to have a high-flying career a doctor needs more than  7 years of studying, and having a full-time education would decrease the time spent on education later in their life.

P2: Accompanying these benefits there are some obvious issues to address in terms of practicality. Keeping students in full-time education until the age of 18 is likely to be expensive, which some developing countries might not be able to sustain. Moreover, continuing education past a certain age may not be relevant to the career prospects of some people. Take a sanitation worker, for example. In this case, only a minimal amount of education is required relative to a barrister or a plastic surgeon.

Conclusion: In conclusion, I agree that the provision of full-time schooling for minors is worthwhile wherever it is relevant to the needs of the students and is economically viable for the country in question.

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In this episode we're brainstorming ideas and writing an advantage/disadvantage essay for the following topic: 

People nowadays tend to have children at older ages. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Intro: Today, there is a tendency for people to give birth and start families at a later stage in their lives. On balance, it seems there are more drawbacks.

P1: Despite these disadvantages, there are certain benefits which can be encapsulated under the umbrella of stability, both: financial and familial. As a couple progresses in life they should have greater financial resources to draw upon to support their children and reduce the negative impact on poverty. In addition to the financial stability, there’s also stability in the family which should increase as the couple matures. As a result, children born at a later stage are less vulnerable to the negative consequences of divorce and family break up which are less common in older pairings.

P2: Although the aforementioned positive aspects appear to have great strength, there are also significant negative factors to consider. Foremost, as people age, they suffer from a greater amount of genetic degradation which can increase the chances of having a child with a genetic defect such as Down's syndrome. Another factor which can have a detrimental effect on a child’s quality of life is the fact that older people tend to have less energy which means they are less able to cope with and raise their relatively more energetic young child. In the same way, there is also a generation gap in terms of relatability. As the age gap between the child and the parents increases their ability to relate to each other and share the same ideas about life could be placed under severe pressure. This may have negative consequences on the child’s upbringing and development. For instance, there could be numerous intra-family conflicts between youngsters and their elderly parents.

Conclusion: In sum, given the greater number of negative elements in comparison to the smaller number of positive aspects of giving birth at an older stage in life, it is reasonable to conclude that it is more beneficial to conceive and raise children at a relatively earlier age.

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It's Maria and Rory here! With this podcast, we aim to give you an insight into how to write high-level IELTS essays. Every episode is a new essay, which we will be writing on the spot, to keep it real and help you follow the course of writing as it happens. We'll be showing you our brainstorming, planning, and writing processes (and have fun along the way, of course). You will learn what it takes to write a great IELTS essay and how to write one yourself!

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